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plastic truth
we are all illusionists
creating masterpieces
of self-deception.
it's up to you to make the choice
whether there is any truth in all this hype.
those enticing beauties
on magazine covers,
ask just one question.
what are you worth?
becauae someone somewhere
as gotta pay.
creating masterpieces
of self-deception.
it's up to you to make the choice
whether there is any truth in all this hype.
those enticing beauties
on magazine covers,
ask just one question.
what are you worth?
becauae someone somewhere
as gotta pay.
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SICKENED
IT SICKENS
ME
DAY AFTER DAY
WHAT YOU
WANT ME TO SAY
IM NOT
GONNA BOW
BEFORE A FUCKING FOOL
GET.YOUR. MIND
OUTTA THE GUTTER
BEFORE YOU FUCKING DROWN
GET.YOUR.MIND
OUTTA THE GUTTER
BEFORE.YOU. END. UP
UNDERGROUND
(Cause it just)
IT SICKENS
ME
DAY AFTER DAY
WHAT YOU
WANT ME TO SAY
I AINT YOUR
FUCKIN.BITCH
YOU CAN RUN
BUT YOU CANT HIDE
YOU CAN RUN
BUT YOU'LL NEVER SURV
IVE
WHAT I HAVE IN STORE
FOR.YOU.THIS.TIME
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IM.NOT ...
ME
DAY AFTER DAY
WHAT YOU
WANT ME TO SAY
IM NOT
GONNA BOW
BEFORE A FUCKING FOOL
GET.YOUR. MIND
OUTTA THE GUTTER
BEFORE YOU FUCKING DROWN
GET.YOUR.MIND
OUTTA THE GUTTER
BEFORE.YOU. END. UP
UNDERGROUND
(Cause it just)
IT SICKENS
ME
DAY AFTER DAY
WHAT YOU
WANT ME TO SAY
I AINT YOUR
FUCKIN.BITCH
YOU CAN RUN
BUT YOU CANT HIDE
YOU CAN RUN
BUT YOU'LL NEVER SURV
IVE
WHAT I HAVE IN STORE
FOR.YOU.THIS.TIME
----------
IM.NOT ...
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puppet of society
I feel like I look strong, but I feel weak.
When I open my mouth, my guilt starts to leak, I cant even speak,
My heart's been eroded,
My mind's gone too, and my thoughts are over flowin
They call me names, and I take things too serious, laughin at my pain, yeah well just hear this bitch
Im not over you,
And I think it's impossible, I hold on to things forever, cause my conscious is unstoppable
You just called the wrong person a fool,
I did try my best in every subject in school, yet I feel like a tool,
Used by the government,...
When I open my mouth, my guilt starts to leak, I cant even speak,
My heart's been eroded,
My mind's gone too, and my thoughts are over flowin
They call me names, and I take things too serious, laughin at my pain, yeah well just hear this bitch
Im not over you,
And I think it's impossible, I hold on to things forever, cause my conscious is unstoppable
You just called the wrong person a fool,
I did try my best in every subject in school, yet I feel like a tool,
Used by the government,...
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0 Comments
Just Look
Look at me , please
with some
real
vision
maybe eyes do see
but it's the mind
that does decision
people always find
what others hide
the truth is written
on pages of our lives
between the lines
we live this mission .
I've died
come back to life
so many times
but I'm not living
I happen through sun light
I sometimes cry
through lack of wisdom
look at me , transcend
come hold this hand
I lend
to a new position
all the old
was once unused
this gives the best
preview ...
with some
real
vision
maybe eyes do see
but it's the mind
that does decision
people always find
what others hide
the truth is written
on pages of our lives
between the lines
we live this mission .
I've died
come back to life
so many times
but I'm not living
I happen through sun light
I sometimes cry
through lack of wisdom
look at me , transcend
come hold this hand
I lend
to a new position
all the old
was once unused
this gives the best
preview ...
40 reads
2 Comments
he'd hoped to do well...
look, you know if there was anything
I could have done
well, she said, yes,
but you were pretty crap at
everything...
I could have done
well, she said, yes,
but you were pretty crap at
everything...
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6 Comments
WHAT THE f**k
W T F do i have to do W T F Love you
W T F do i have to say W T F Just stay
W T F do you want to hear W T F Yes dear
W T F do you want me to see W T F Real me
W T F do you want me to feel W T F Good deal
W T F do i have to say W T F Just stay
W T F do you want to hear W T F Yes dear
W T F do you want me to see W T F Real me
W T F do you want me to feel W T F Good deal
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4 Comments
on finding her, sick, in the morning...
just get out, this has absolutely
nothing to do with you, as far as
I'm concerned,
nevertheless...
nothing to do with you, as far as
I'm concerned,
nevertheless...
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The Heart Is A Virus
All consuming, without it you die.
Evaporates the soul or sends you flying high
As hard as newspaper, also as soft as three-ply.
Pumping fluids into every corner, and leaves you high and dry.
Encourages bad behaviour,
Pushes over the edge without introducing your saviour.
Connecting to soul and mind you'd figure.
Tossing you into disconnect making you the failure.
Pulsating beat that should've brought bliss.
Inevitably leaves you lost in the abyss.
Love? What is love but lust, you'll dismiss.
For abandonment comes sealed with a kiss.
...
Evaporates the soul or sends you flying high
As hard as newspaper, also as soft as three-ply.
Pumping fluids into every corner, and leaves you high and dry.
Encourages bad behaviour,
Pushes over the edge without introducing your saviour.
Connecting to soul and mind you'd figure.
Tossing you into disconnect making you the failure.
Pulsating beat that should've brought bliss.
Inevitably leaves you lost in the abyss.
Love? What is love but lust, you'll dismiss.
For abandonment comes sealed with a kiss.
...
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0 Comments
the preservation of
A leaf
ressurected
by decomposition.
ressurected
by decomposition.
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5 Comments
Figuring It Out
Somewhere along the course of time
In the world God engineered
The image of the female figure
Came to be secretly revered
Rather than listen with his eyes
Man listened with his ears
To the rhetoric of biblical verses
Mistranslated throughout the years
A harmless admiration of natural art
Became the psychological art of distrust
Man convincing himself that looking
Opened him to the perils of lust
He guarded himself against what he saw
Since eyes were prone to deception
And fascination with surface beauty ...
In the world God engineered
The image of the female figure
Came to be secretly revered
Rather than listen with his eyes
Man listened with his ears
To the rhetoric of biblical verses
Mistranslated throughout the years
A harmless admiration of natural art
Became the psychological art of distrust
Man convincing himself that looking
Opened him to the perils of lust
He guarded himself against what he saw
Since eyes were prone to deception
And fascination with surface beauty ...
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0 Comments
.:The Full-Blown Buzz:.
This art, this music
It’s been birthed or...so it seems
Conceived for all its worth to ream & gleam
Retaining that shine of the historical
Doing so without it being rhetorical; those
daredevil deeds of reeds
The theology of senses; the soaring
No this art, this music isn’t about the boring
This is about the rapturous in content
Straight-up...Trumpeting the bent
Each sax to the max
Flexing inside & within every mood
Traps tripping, riding a hyped sense of euphoria
Bass lines sliding...wild thumbs
Gliding...
It’s been birthed or...so it seems
Conceived for all its worth to ream & gleam
Retaining that shine of the historical
Doing so without it being rhetorical; those
daredevil deeds of reeds
The theology of senses; the soaring
No this art, this music isn’t about the boring
This is about the rapturous in content
Straight-up...Trumpeting the bent
Each sax to the max
Flexing inside & within every mood
Traps tripping, riding a hyped sense of euphoria
Bass lines sliding...wild thumbs
Gliding...
39 reads
2 Comments
What Is A Pome?
For those who incorrectly guessed
A pome is a brief quest
Lasting nowhere near as long as a tome
Unexpectedly ending shortly after it starts
And in the privacy of your own home
May involve K-Y Jelly
A lawn gnome
Perhaps auto parts
Sometimes it feels really good
Mostly it smarts
So, don't be a hero
Like when in Rome
I suggest you do as the Romans do
Except for Nero
Best known for accidentally burning everything down
While lighting his own farts
A pome is a brief quest
Lasting nowhere near as long as a tome
Unexpectedly ending shortly after it starts
And in the privacy of your own home
May involve K-Y Jelly
A lawn gnome
Perhaps auto parts
Sometimes it feels really good
Mostly it smarts
So, don't be a hero
Like when in Rome
I suggest you do as the Romans do
Except for Nero
Best known for accidentally burning everything down
While lighting his own farts
34 reads
3 Comments
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