Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems
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Cowgirl Up!!!!!
Here we go!!!!
Hot and steamy Nashville night
Goin' out with friends
YEEEEE HAAAAW!!!!
Short 'lil summer dress
Spaghetti strapped white eyelet
Perfect hint of perfume...Tresor
Bare legs and cowboy boots
The bar is packed to full capacity
Our seats were reserved
My friend's husband is playing tonight
They're up next!!!
Our drinks finally arrive
A shot of Jameson to start off
Mmmmm....feel the burn
As it runs down my throat
Wish you were here
Damn....wouldn't that have been one hell of a night?!?
The...
Hot and steamy Nashville night
Goin' out with friends
YEEEEE HAAAAW!!!!
Short 'lil summer dress
Spaghetti strapped white eyelet
Perfect hint of perfume...Tresor
Bare legs and cowboy boots
The bar is packed to full capacity
Our seats were reserved
My friend's husband is playing tonight
They're up next!!!
Our drinks finally arrive
A shot of Jameson to start off
Mmmmm....feel the burn
As it runs down my throat
Wish you were here
Damn....wouldn't that have been one hell of a night?!?
The...
#dark
#teens
#soldiers #romantic
#soldiers #romantic
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The Kill
I don't like to think of dying
But what if your arms could kill?
What if all my insecurities could be gone in a flash
Fears washed away in an instant
All at the power of
Your touch
Would you go for it?
What if your embrace contains the secret ingredient
To all that I'm missing
And have never quite been able to find
If I knew
I'd let it stir in my mind
But I would remain still
Moved by you
Deeply, too
But not enough
To really follow where you lead
Because I'm afraid of what you see
So when you come around
I...
But what if your arms could kill?
What if all my insecurities could be gone in a flash
Fears washed away in an instant
All at the power of
Your touch
Would you go for it?
What if your embrace contains the secret ingredient
To all that I'm missing
And have never quite been able to find
If I knew
I'd let it stir in my mind
But I would remain still
Moved by you
Deeply, too
But not enough
To really follow where you lead
Because I'm afraid of what you see
So when you come around
I...
#strength
#rejection
#courage #science
#courage #science
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Unbearable
Phases
the poor face these days are nothing
compared
to what emotions put people through
these days,
when knowing what they have
but thinking they actually own it all,
while they actually happen
to be the used
by those they amuse most
of the time
calling it love
but not being able
to bear it
because those they love
bury it
with smiles on their face
that says I love you
night and day
but my plan is
to make you pay the price
for dating me and
taking me out on
dates
like you know what it...
the poor face these days are nothing
compared
to what emotions put people through
these days,
when knowing what they have
but thinking they actually own it all,
while they actually happen
to be the used
by those they amuse most
of the time
calling it love
but not being able
to bear it
because those they love
bury it
with smiles on their face
that says I love you
night and day
but my plan is
to make you pay the price
for dating me and
taking me out on
dates
like you know what it...
#wife
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Love You (so here's another poem for you)
I've never been scared to die.
Try, maybe.
But so far that hasn't stopped me.
But I never fucking succeed because
I'm such a fucking failure.
All I know is anymore that now I
have the best damn reason to
survive and get through all this bullshit
and I love you and I hope you know
that.
But, losing you is the scariest thing I
could even imagine.
I love you.
I miss you constantly.
Losing you would be the end of me.
Try, maybe.
But so far that hasn't stopped me.
But I never fucking succeed because
I'm such a fucking failure.
All I know is anymore that now I
have the best damn reason to
survive and get through all this bullshit
and I love you and I hope you know
that.
But, losing you is the scariest thing I
could even imagine.
I love you.
I miss you constantly.
Losing you would be the end of me.
#hate
#grief
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Choices
I don't know what she's doing with me
She's beautiful and I'm
Well let's be honest I'm not
But she looks at me
And she holds me
And she kisses me
Like I'm the only person
That she has ever wanted
The only person she will ever want
And really I just want to know
Why?
Why would she ever choose me?
And she did
She chose me
Before I chose her
She chose me
I hope I can be worth it.
She's beautiful and I'm
Well let's be honest I'm not
But she looks at me
And she holds me
And she kisses me
Like I'm the only person
That she has ever wanted
The only person she will ever want
And really I just want to know
Why?
Why would she ever choose me?
And she did
She chose me
Before I chose her
She chose me
I hope I can be worth it.
#rejection
#courage
#dark
#husband
#conflict
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me and puppy are on the same page
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#rejection
#courage
#children
#soldiers
#conflict
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Darkened mist
Fear an evil lurking death,
Chilling breath upon life's neck.
Fingers pressed on earths delight,
All alone this fateful night.
Misty thoughts swirl around,
Upon this dead and baron ground.
Deep below no searching light,
On this dark and misty night.
Hollow screams fill life's air,
Enveloped in Deaths icy glare.
Surrounded by things I cannot touch,
On life's vision I cannot trust.
All alone with nothing inside,
This painful life I cannot hide.
Chilling breath upon life's neck.
Fingers pressed on earths delight,
All alone this fateful night.
Misty thoughts swirl around,
Upon this dead and baron ground.
Deep below no searching light,
On this dark and misty night.
Hollow screams fill life's air,
Enveloped in Deaths icy glare.
Surrounded by things I cannot touch,
On life's vision I cannot trust.
All alone with nothing inside,
This painful life I cannot hide.
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tropic rain (w/ JohnFeddeler)
b]feel the rapid flow
of thinning blood.
a vicious beating
within the heart.
pumping the fluid
of sultry lust
warming the darkest soul.
with heavy breathing
comes a sinful desire...
tympany of heartbeats
ceiling fan whirling, a whispering ghost
outside, pulse of tropic rain
mournful song of night birds
shadow of palms caress sullen air
dance toward a candle with no flame
away from reality, within the painting of a dream
made for lovers... [b]
of thinning blood.
a vicious beating
within the heart.
pumping the fluid
of sultry lust
warming the darkest soul.
with heavy breathing
comes a sinful desire...
tympany of heartbeats
ceiling fan whirling, a whispering ghost
outside, pulse of tropic rain
mournful song of night birds
shadow of palms caress sullen air
dance toward a candle with no flame
away from reality, within the painting of a dream
made for lovers... [b]
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Madness
Madness..........is it my perceived reality our yours?
Can you see through my eyes, the torrid life of a forgotten whore?
The jagged pieces that are left of me,
Floating in a tumulus sea.
The thousand tears that I have shed,
The vile blood that still runs red.
The "Who" you see is not who I am,
Too tired, too old, to have faith again.
Pondering this thing that we call life,
Once was raw......like Satans wife.
Exquisite torture, no physical pain.
A broken soul, never whole again.
Little insights I give...
Can you see through my eyes, the torrid life of a forgotten whore?
The jagged pieces that are left of me,
Floating in a tumulus sea.
The thousand tears that I have shed,
The vile blood that still runs red.
The "Who" you see is not who I am,
Too tired, too old, to have faith again.
Pondering this thing that we call life,
Once was raw......like Satans wife.
Exquisite torture, no physical pain.
A broken soul, never whole again.
Little insights I give...
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If True Love Burns
If water was time
I'd drink it
If you were mind
I'd think it
If true love burns
I'd risk it--
I'd risk every thing
If snowflakes were eyes
I'd blink it
If you were the sky
I would cry
Because you and I
Are wingless
If true love burns
I'd risk it--
I'd risk every thing
I'd drink it
If you were mind
I'd think it
If true love burns
I'd risk it--
I'd risk every thing
If snowflakes were eyes
I'd blink it
If you were the sky
I would cry
Because you and I
Are wingless
If true love burns
I'd risk it--
I'd risk every thing
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History is the past
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It's Always Been You
"Come on, no goodbye kiss?", you said while I almost slapped your cute face.
"Oh...do you love him?", you texted me while I quietly said no.
Loving you is a difficult thing to do.
Living is even harder without you.
No one will be you...have fun in the Navy...
It's always been you, I always come back to you for a reason but I don't want to say I love you.
"Oh...do you love him?", you texted me while I quietly said no.
Loving you is a difficult thing to do.
Living is even harder without you.
No one will be you...have fun in the Navy...
It's always been you, I always come back to you for a reason but I don't want to say I love you.
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