Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems
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"Don't f**king text me again!"
"Don't fucking text me again!"
The words that broke my heart... again.
The words that will spell my end.
Goodbye
Forever
My life was a lie
I'll get over you, never.
The words that broke my heart... again.
The words that will spell my end.
Goodbye
Forever
My life was a lie
I'll get over you, never.
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viridian
viridian
lushly through hushed slope and stream
down the rushy glade and glen
under our shy shade of the forest
shimmer of grasses and dance of leaves
in darkish and tawny eve we two in bliss upon
the blankets over still quivering earth -
dash of marguerites and poppy reds paint the stage
beneath autumnal tangle of foliage violet-bluish and green
- the stunning fresco extends with blonde and strawberry curls...
lushly through hushed slope and stream
down the rushy glade and glen
under our shy shade of the forest
shimmer of grasses and dance of leaves
in darkish and tawny eve we two in bliss upon
the blankets over still quivering earth -
dash of marguerites and poppy reds paint the stage
beneath autumnal tangle of foliage violet-bluish and green
- the stunning fresco extends with blonde and strawberry curls...
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4 Comments
Control
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Love Song for Kaltenbrunner
Scar faced horse headed monster
Exhaling ashes
With the breath of burning flesh
Scaring women and children
Yet groveling at the feet of your enemy
With no pride or dignity
No excuse but “I was just following orders”
A weakling of the highest order
Kaltenbrunner oh Kaltenbrunner
The world is filled with you
From the deserts of Saudi Arabia
To the casinos of Vegas
From the US capitol to the jungles of Africa
In every army
In every boardroom
As history moves forward
The faces change
But the stink of burning flesh
remains
Exhaling ashes
With the breath of burning flesh
Scaring women and children
Yet groveling at the feet of your enemy
With no pride or dignity
No excuse but “I was just following orders”
A weakling of the highest order
Kaltenbrunner oh Kaltenbrunner
The world is filled with you
From the deserts of Saudi Arabia
To the casinos of Vegas
From the US capitol to the jungles of Africa
In every army
In every boardroom
As history moves forward
The faces change
But the stink of burning flesh
remains
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You Weren't ever there..
You Weren't Ever there...
You watched me bleed and Cry..
You said you'd never say Good Bye..
But Of Course That One was a Fucking Lie..
You weren't ever there..
You watched me fade away..and Break..
Piece By Piece..
Every thought of You Tore Me Down More..
I Hate You..But Still Care..
And I Don't Know Why..
You Were The One Who said Goodbye..
Every Word That Came Out Of Your Mouth Was a God Damn Lie..
You Watched Me Bleed And cry..
When Someone Mentioned Your Name I Couldn't Breathe..
The Memories Of You And Me Slowly Killed Me Inside.....
You watched me bleed and Cry..
You said you'd never say Good Bye..
But Of Course That One was a Fucking Lie..
You weren't ever there..
You watched me fade away..and Break..
Piece By Piece..
Every thought of You Tore Me Down More..
I Hate You..But Still Care..
And I Don't Know Why..
You Were The One Who said Goodbye..
Every Word That Came Out Of Your Mouth Was a God Damn Lie..
You Watched Me Bleed And cry..
When Someone Mentioned Your Name I Couldn't Breathe..
The Memories Of You And Me Slowly Killed Me Inside.....
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Diversions
She painted me a picture
Of a beautiful scene
Told me it was heaven
Past the wilting green
Painted the sunset purple
Because of the royal hues
Swirled the clouds around the sky
To make it seem all fused
The object was waving goodbye
The ship was sailing away
The ocean was wearing its caps
As my love drifted astray
Of a beautiful scene
Told me it was heaven
Past the wilting green
Painted the sunset purple
Because of the royal hues
Swirled the clouds around the sky
To make it seem all fused
The object was waving goodbye
The ship was sailing away
The ocean was wearing its caps
As my love drifted astray
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Without Someone To Love
Life has become a meaningless voyage.
Lost in the silence.
Of mental static noise.
Life unfulfilled.
A kings ransom.
Less it's royalty of joys.
But It all means nothing to me.
Without someone to love.
Would you love my invisibility.
Hiding in plain sight.
So blatantly unseen my ghost.
Tormenting his pride.
Loneliness is a slow death.
I've willingly accepted to apply.
And It would mean everything.
To have someone to love.
But my vessel lies empty.
Withering of rot.
Somethings gone missing.
Like a thief in the night. ...
Lost in the silence.
Of mental static noise.
Life unfulfilled.
A kings ransom.
Less it's royalty of joys.
But It all means nothing to me.
Without someone to love.
Would you love my invisibility.
Hiding in plain sight.
So blatantly unseen my ghost.
Tormenting his pride.
Loneliness is a slow death.
I've willingly accepted to apply.
And It would mean everything.
To have someone to love.
But my vessel lies empty.
Withering of rot.
Somethings gone missing.
Like a thief in the night. ...
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Pyro of Despair
I like the flames,
dark and menacing,
dancing across my face and yours.
Like a pitch black light,
another memory is burned,
as well as forgotten.
I'm sure one day,
I will regret this storm ablaze,
but right now,
im forgetting you,
for killing me.
We were happy,
we could've made it work,
but you left me here,
alone again.
The black flames,
scorch our skin,
and rebirth a new.
I hate you,
for hating yourself,
when you were my heaven.
dark and menacing,
dancing across my face and yours.
Like a pitch black light,
another memory is burned,
as well as forgotten.
I'm sure one day,
I will regret this storm ablaze,
but right now,
im forgetting you,
for killing me.
We were happy,
we could've made it work,
but you left me here,
alone again.
The black flames,
scorch our skin,
and rebirth a new.
I hate you,
for hating yourself,
when you were my heaven.
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Affection
Let me lay my head
On your chest
Arm laying across you
Pink nails gliding
Around your stomach and chest
Please.....hold me back
Squeeze me oh so nice and tight
Rub down my side and curves
Show me your true feelings
Without saying a word
It's not about getting attention
Or about being needy
Or even sex
It's really simple
Only affection shining through
Now give me a kiss
Good night babydoll
On your chest
Arm laying across you
Pink nails gliding
Around your stomach and chest
Please.....hold me back
Squeeze me oh so nice and tight
Rub down my side and curves
Show me your true feelings
Without saying a word
It's not about getting attention
Or about being needy
Or even sex
It's really simple
Only affection shining through
Now give me a kiss
Good night babydoll
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7 Comments
Exhaling You
Piano keys play a couple chords,
then a sweet voice tells me about her pain.
She misses him, she knows she was wrong
but her voice isn't corny, it's deep.
It is caring.
Her back-up singers echo her.
He was her everything.
Should I turn down the music?
The sun is going down now,
The lyrics are outlining my life:
warm breeze, soft words, lips, cheeks, his face begins to form.
But the song murmurs, the chorus ends.
Chirping echoes the blue sky,
brown leaves fall unnoticed.
My earbuds fitting into place but
the same song is...
then a sweet voice tells me about her pain.
She misses him, she knows she was wrong
but her voice isn't corny, it's deep.
It is caring.
Her back-up singers echo her.
He was her everything.
Should I turn down the music?
The sun is going down now,
The lyrics are outlining my life:
warm breeze, soft words, lips, cheeks, his face begins to form.
But the song murmurs, the chorus ends.
Chirping echoes the blue sky,
brown leaves fall unnoticed.
My earbuds fitting into place but
the same song is...
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Gathering Smiles
this is serious,
why do you always laugh Mom?
tears are too messy
why do you always laugh Mom?
tears are too messy
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1 Comment
Shall we, finally, a day
Shall we, finally, a day
Take our hands in real
Together
For a minute, just a second
And kiss your fingers
Caress your silky skin
Just one time
Shall we, finally, a day
Walk together in real
In a park
For a minute, just a second
And talk about us
Our love for the other
Just one time
Shall we, finally, a day
Share our passion in real
As we wish strongly
For a minute, just a second
I'll hug you in my arms
And kiss your sensual lips
Just one time
Shall...
Take our hands in real
Together
For a minute, just a second
And kiss your fingers
Caress your silky skin
Just one time
Shall we, finally, a day
Walk together in real
In a park
For a minute, just a second
And talk about us
Our love for the other
Just one time
Shall we, finally, a day
Share our passion in real
As we wish strongly
For a minute, just a second
I'll hug you in my arms
And kiss your sensual lips
Just one time
Shall...
66 reads
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