Poetry competition CLOSED 6th September 2014 6:31pm
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Anonymous
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Dark Haiku
oldgregg19
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Poetry Contest Description
Write a depressive haiku
Example:
I look out on the world,
All I see is sorrowful pain,
And I feel it all,
I look out on the world,
All I see is sorrowful pain,
And I feel it all,
malin69
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How many entry allowed by author? Old haiku allowed or only new?
Just a comment about the text you give as example : it is not an haiku, because not respecting the sequence 5-7-5. Your example had a sequence of 6-8-5!!!!!
Just a comment about the text you give as example : it is not an haiku, because not respecting the sequence 5-7-5. Your example had a sequence of 6-8-5!!!!!
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Swallowed just enough
Capsulized gallows beckon
Wash it down with Jack's
Capsulized gallows beckon
Wash it down with Jack's
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Would have liked to participate but I'm a little confused by the not haiku-like form of your example on which Malin already commented.
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Watching TV news
facing ubiquitous death -
proud to be human
facing ubiquitous death -
proud to be human
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Chiyo said:Would have liked to participate but I'm a little confused by the not haiku-like form of your example on which Malin already commented.
I agree with Malin and Miss Chiyo...let's honor the tradition of the original Japanese haiku in its 5/7/5 syllable format for a total of 17 syllables. The haikus that we are reading today are English translations of the original Japanese haikus in which the syllables are either lost or added.
If not in 5/7/5 syllable format, then it's just a trestet. Just my 2 cents...![](/images/forum/smilies/smile.gif)
I agree with Malin and Miss Chiyo...let's honor the tradition of the original Japanese haiku in its 5/7/5 syllable format for a total of 17 syllables. The haikus that we are reading today are English translations of the original Japanese haikus in which the syllables are either lost or added.
If not in 5/7/5 syllable format, then it's just a trestet. Just my 2 cents...
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oldgregg19
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i stuck the lines in a syllable counter, must have messed up. everything else doesn't matter one entry per person
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Fucking governments
No care of nature on earth!
Where's our future!
No care of nature on earth!
Where's our future!
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You will die someday
Life's entirety is just
Disintegration
Life's entirety is just
Disintegration
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Massochist grinning
Suicide is the gateway
To an endless pain
Suicide is the gateway
To an endless pain