How you left me
Duncan
Duncan Alexander
Forum Posts: 2018
Duncan Alexander
Dangerous Mind
1
Joined 4th May 2010Forum Posts: 2018
Poetry Contest Description
A poem about the state you were left in a breakup.
*after a breakup
*One poem per poet.
*Old and new poems welcome.
*Can you try keep it under 200 words.
I'll kick it off.
Blood
On the walls
floor
ceiling
and door
It oozes
it drips
it floods
and it pours
This house
is my heart
and at the moment it hurts
Blood gushes out the power outlets
and squirts out of the fan,
it rises out the floor boards
marring any idea of who I am
The blood quickens
congeals
then clots,
a scar across my soul
and in the aftermath of all this blood
it doesn't feel like it'll ever be whole.
Good luck.
*One poem per poet.
*Old and new poems welcome.
*Can you try keep it under 200 words.
I'll kick it off.
Blood
On the walls
floor
ceiling
and door
It oozes
it drips
it floods
and it pours
This house
is my heart
and at the moment it hurts
Blood gushes out the power outlets
and squirts out of the fan,
it rises out the floor boards
marring any idea of who I am
The blood quickens
congeals
then clots,
a scar across my soul
and in the aftermath of all this blood
it doesn't feel like it'll ever be whole.
Good luck.
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Duncan
Duncan Alexander
Forum Posts: 2018
Duncan Alexander
Dangerous Mind
1
Joined 4th May 2010Forum Posts: 2018
Always a pleasure. It's good to get it out. :)
jaspersilence
killstrangerkill
Forum Posts: 649
killstrangerkill
Fire of Insight
6
Joined 12th Dec 2012Forum Posts: 649
WHAT A MESS
I'd be lying if I said you kept me sane...
Though every drink now is liquor.
The cigarette smoke is thicker.
The heroin works quicker,
and I'm bleeding out a river
Duncan
Duncan Alexander
Forum Posts: 2018
Duncan Alexander
Dangerous Mind
1
Joined 4th May 2010Forum Posts: 2018
Loving the intensity. Self-destruction to the max.
cjmshadow
Caleb
Forum Posts: 557
Caleb
Fire of Insight
10
Joined 2nd Apr 2011Forum Posts: 557
ABCs
Alone now in the cold night
Because you left me to suffer
Cut me with your piercing words, and now I...
Drown in depression and sorrow
Everything I thought was true was a lie
Fuck you, fuck this, fuck it all
Get out of my heart, get out of my life
Hell is awaiting you for what you've done
It's too late to apologize now
Just accept the consequences for your sins and crimes
Know that you just threw away the chance of a lifetime
Love you had, everlasting and overflowing
Maybe if you hadn't waited so long
Now it's too late, I've faded away and it's...
Over now, once and for good
Perhaps one day you'll be forgiven for what you've done
Question yourself over and over why you did it, and was it worth it, you...
Ripped my heart out
Shredded it into pieces
Then threw it away in the dirt
Unforgiven and unloved is what you are now
Vicious and heartless is how you acted towards me
When will you ever learn, when will you see
X marks the spot on my chest where my heart goes
You need to put it back please, for it's no longer yours
Zero...it's the amount of love I have for you now, and it's all you'll ever have
Alone now in the cold night
Because you left me to suffer
Cut me with your piercing words, and now I...
Drown in depression and sorrow
Everything I thought was true was a lie
Fuck you, fuck this, fuck it all
Get out of my heart, get out of my life
Hell is awaiting you for what you've done
It's too late to apologize now
Just accept the consequences for your sins and crimes
Know that you just threw away the chance of a lifetime
Love you had, everlasting and overflowing
Maybe if you hadn't waited so long
Now it's too late, I've faded away and it's...
Over now, once and for good
Perhaps one day you'll be forgiven for what you've done
Question yourself over and over why you did it, and was it worth it, you...
Ripped my heart out
Shredded it into pieces
Then threw it away in the dirt
Unforgiven and unloved is what you are now
Vicious and heartless is how you acted towards me
When will you ever learn, when will you see
X marks the spot on my chest where my heart goes
You need to put it back please, for it's no longer yours
Zero...it's the amount of love I have for you now, and it's all you'll ever have
Duncan
Duncan Alexander
Forum Posts: 2018
Duncan Alexander
Dangerous Mind
1
Joined 4th May 2010Forum Posts: 2018
That piece was awesome, the ABC's of a bad breakup. I was impressed that the alphabet theme flowed so well, it didn't seem forced at any point.
MadameLavender
Forum Posts: 2318
Guardian of Shadows
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Joined 17th Feb 2013Forum Posts: 2318
Weapons Of War
I have drawn out my weapons of war,
I stand at the ready, aimed;
I have given up the fight, with you, for you—
I no longer have a clue.
I no longer move you, and
I no longer am moved by you;
I won’t play your game anymore,
I am not “stupid bitch”.
I will find out if you’ve found another,
I have already found mine;
I don’t care what you do anymore
I will have my cake and eat it, too.
I will take what is rightfully mine, and
I will take what I brought into this mess;
I will not take what is yours, and
I will not accept anything I am not due.
I will be loved, in all the ways
I always wanted to be, but that
I never got from you;
I am so much more than you realize.
I am covered by the Blood of Christ, the Armor of God, and
I will seize each moment as it comes, and
I will live life the way it’s supposed to be, and how
I envisioned it, originally, because most importantly,
I WILL NOT DIE FOR YOUR DISEASE.
I have drawn out my weapons of war,
I stand at the ready, aimed;
I have given up the fight, with you, for you—
I no longer have a clue.
I no longer move you, and
I no longer am moved by you;
I won’t play your game anymore,
I am not “stupid bitch”.
I will find out if you’ve found another,
I have already found mine;
I don’t care what you do anymore
I will have my cake and eat it, too.
I will take what is rightfully mine, and
I will take what I brought into this mess;
I will not take what is yours, and
I will not accept anything I am not due.
I will be loved, in all the ways
I always wanted to be, but that
I never got from you;
I am so much more than you realize.
I am covered by the Blood of Christ, the Armor of God, and
I will seize each moment as it comes, and
I will live life the way it’s supposed to be, and how
I envisioned it, originally, because most importantly,
I WILL NOT DIE FOR YOUR DISEASE.
AlisVolatPropriis8
Rakhi Rudra
Forum Posts: 298
Rakhi Rudra
Fire of Insight
6
Joined 24th Oct 2011Forum Posts: 298
Lost and liquidated
Prophecy that fled from heaven's
dressing in haste where
shapeless shards of
broken window gathered
her flocking red
underneath the fair gravity
For she tried to show him
rainbow in rangoli
while he'd just see
rainbow in shooting
green charts
Pulling his shirt she lifted
his egoist chin to fix
stares on the new moon which
seemed a new affair each time to her
forgot she was
guided by crossed streets
And now you seek those
steps that were once
peckish for your muted glint
when you
can't unlock the locked locks.
Prophecy that fled from heaven's
dressing in haste where
shapeless shards of
broken window gathered
her flocking red
underneath the fair gravity
For she tried to show him
rainbow in rangoli
while he'd just see
rainbow in shooting
green charts
Pulling his shirt she lifted
his egoist chin to fix
stares on the new moon which
seemed a new affair each time to her
forgot she was
guided by crossed streets
And now you seek those
steps that were once
peckish for your muted glint
when you
can't unlock the locked locks.
Duncan
Duncan Alexander
Forum Posts: 2018
Duncan Alexander
Dangerous Mind
1
Joined 4th May 2010Forum Posts: 2018
Thanks for the entry MadameLavender.
"I will be loved, in all the ways
I always wanted to be, but that
I never got from you;
I am so much more than you realize."
That struck a chord with me.
Rakhi Rhudra, that piece was absolutely stunning. I love the words that you use and the way your work wanders.
"I will be loved, in all the ways
I always wanted to be, but that
I never got from you;
I am so much more than you realize."
That struck a chord with me.
Rakhi Rhudra, that piece was absolutely stunning. I love the words that you use and the way your work wanders.
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Duncan
Duncan Alexander
Forum Posts: 2018
Duncan Alexander
Dangerous Mind
1
Joined 4th May 2010Forum Posts: 2018
Straight to the point.
"All he ever wanted was your pussy,
I wanted your heart, too."
Solid entry Strider.
Edit: Actually that excerpt being at the end of the piece makes it pretty far from straight to the point but you get my meaning. :)
"All he ever wanted was your pussy,
I wanted your heart, too."
Solid entry Strider.
Edit: Actually that excerpt being at the end of the piece makes it pretty far from straight to the point but you get my meaning. :)
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