Thoughts V's Feelings (Advanced Challenge but All welcome)

I Think That I Feel , Don't I ?  


If I think
it's only a prediction
of how it seems
without true validation
when I feel
true emotion
this is for real
far from any notions
sensory lessons
do get learned
taken from messing
with things that do burn
a memory imprint
stays much longer
if we don't win
the feelings are stronger .

Passion doesn't think
it takes you over
but your brain says blink
for ocular cover .

Thoughts cannot feel
they only surmise
but feelings they deal
all reasons to lie
to kill or to murder
are different in many ways
one is emotive
the other a thought
that pays .

I'll be back miki.. I can't wait to do this. very stimulating on the senses.

What A cool comp Miki!!!

FEELINGS OF A THOUGHTFUL NATURE

thoughts have been given
written, dreamed envisioned
since days of Youth
these the passing, glances
back and forward over the shoulder
through many woods

thinking thoughts, plans the head
what is reasoning, rational direction
scheming completions
weigh of outcome, where
vision, dreams, implementation greets

guts tell me when to jump
ignore, pay the piper
flames that burn, incessantly yearn
carry torches, light up skies
these can be thoughts, darken turn
blood boils, thickens, turmoil
stench of death, sickness it left
howls, screams ,hands laid upon thee
scars unseen, scars that see
brand life and place thou be

ever is felt light in ones life
as gifts the heavens do bring
gathering of friends, grins
wells of knowing them
to perish the thought, giving them up
spiteful, fates clemency
rush of spirit, the crush of Love
guides, watchtowers, lighthouses
our life
this the touch from above

feeling,rip of the skin
outside, within
dragging daggers, loving of friends
wanting to care, feeling the share
knowing you should, all well and good
feel the pull, think the action
impetus
implements both
effect,affect
sinking boat or ship of gold

interaction of thought, cares, what knots
share the picture of souls thoughts
what it IS to be, live to breathe
finding what truly is felt
direction, purpose, life in person
grateful for cards however he's dealt

aren't we lucky, think on these things
tomorrows dreams, hauntings of yesterdays
all the scenes, worlds little stage
given out, day after day
all I can say is, I know what I thought
I think on my dreams
I know how I've felt,
and feelings, keep me
dreaming


(any better? lol)

A Sense of Irony

Hamlet and Laertes vied to outdo each other  
In grief over dead Ophelia.  
They leapt into her grave and grappled,  
Each proclaiming the vastness of his desolation.  
But was this true emotion?  
Or was it rather the self-dramatization  
Which can afflict us all  
When we feel in the presence  
Of momentous happenings?  
   
In other lands, we see the crowds  
Around a leader's funeral.  
They wail, they tear their hair,  
They are beside themselves with grief,  
They throng the streets and will not be consoled.  
Does emotion lie so close to the surface?  
Or does this public outpouring of grief  
Satisfy a self-indulgent need within  
To feel that they are being overwhelmed  
By something awesome, greater than themselves?  
   
I never saw myself as a leaper on to coffins,  
But perhaps that is my lack.    
Perhaps to see oneself  
Is one's undoing.  
It may be that a true response to life  
Is acting on the moment without thought,  
Following instinct and blood  
Without reflection pulling at the sleeve  
With a restraining hand.  
   
Perhaps I, then, am the self-dramatist,  
The one who feels he plays a part,  
And perhaps that nagging sense of irony  
Is just the way I keep a distance  
Between myself  
And Life.

Anonymous said:<< post removed >>

I am glad you like the comp idea and grateful for your entry. I like the way you have chosen to incorporate soulful feelings and dreamlike thoughts. I am finding it challenging to give feedback on what I would like to see incorporated more into the piece while trying not to infringe on poetic license, personal style, and creativity. I have decided though, that since this is an advanced challenge level comp-I will do a bit of that. your poem is thought provoking and definitely has merit -my favourite part is
"interaction of thought, cares and what knots
share the picture of souls thoughts
what it IS to be, live and to breathe
finding what truly is felt
direction and purpose, life in a person
grateful for cards he's been dealt "

I would like to see a little more depth in showing the difference between thoughts and feelings throughout or added in a little more..also, maybe breaking the piece into a few stanzas will give the flow greater readability. I do love it, I'm just being very particular on this comp ( I want to really pose a true challenge to the talented writers here)

A nicely penned piece, either way-edit or not..and I thank you again for entering![/quote]

Thank You Miki...I WILL heed the advice...and understand the reasoning...I write in a blur as may show quite easily...this construes clarity at times...I greatly appreciate the input

Thanks, Miki - a thoughtful and interesting critique.