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U.N.I.T.Y.
Let's unite
Without unity were destined to fight
Amongs one another we are all
Sisters & Brothers
No more tears from a mother
Whose pain from a son slain
Tear drops are they rain derived from the insane
We must make a change
Please make a choice and use your voice
Protest cause no more suffering in silence
When we are exposed to violence
Tired, hungry & poor we will no longer endure
The brutality knocking on our door
So lets end all wars
It's beneficial to make a change
Destiny is ours to hold & control
So lets all...
Without unity were destined to fight
Amongs one another we are all
Sisters & Brothers
No more tears from a mother
Whose pain from a son slain
Tear drops are they rain derived from the insane
We must make a change
Please make a choice and use your voice
Protest cause no more suffering in silence
When we are exposed to violence
Tired, hungry & poor we will no longer endure
The brutality knocking on our door
So lets end all wars
It's beneficial to make a change
Destiny is ours to hold & control
So lets all...
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5 Comments
Words.
Words are such a crazy and powerful thing.
But see the only thing words can't do, is change what happens.
So you can tell me.
I won't amount to anything,
Even scream it to me.
But it's up to me what happens next.
Your words are just sounds,
Drifting around me.
So I can tell you,
I'll be a hero someday.
And you can laugh in my face.
But that's okay.
Cause it's up to me what happens next.
And I will be a hero one day.
To my little girl I'll be a hero...
And I'll be exactly what I want to be.
Words are evil and words are powerless...
But see the only thing words can't do, is change what happens.
So you can tell me.
I won't amount to anything,
Even scream it to me.
But it's up to me what happens next.
Your words are just sounds,
Drifting around me.
So I can tell you,
I'll be a hero someday.
And you can laugh in my face.
But that's okay.
Cause it's up to me what happens next.
And I will be a hero one day.
To my little girl I'll be a hero...
And I'll be exactly what I want to be.
Words are evil and words are powerless...
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arcade grenade
arcade grenade
or a sudden dream of sundering
the blood pulls us
zig-zag
counterclockwise
unfolding as we go
bodies dislocating against the locks and bars
cracking precisely at the particle
and like steam we sigh
ghostly into ethereal night
arching against eachother,
achingly metamorphosed.
...
or a sudden dream of sundering
the blood pulls us
zig-zag
counterclockwise
unfolding as we go
bodies dislocating against the locks and bars
cracking precisely at the particle
and like steam we sigh
ghostly into ethereal night
arching against eachother,
achingly metamorphosed.
...
27 reads
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cling film
White picket holed trenches
Putting up fences
Four walled grave
Your face reminded him of his knuckles that time
Re-aligning stomachs
With bladders and baggy's
Swelling waters cushioning the baby drowning in floods of noir and tears
Salty seas dried
Crystallized
How much meth does it take to change a lightbulb?
Its a joke
Wolf ran out of puff so the pigs blew it down
Brown brick
Veins for trains
Moving mountains with a table spoon, hot knives and a folk in the road
"Should be feeding with the tools you've been...
Putting up fences
Four walled grave
Your face reminded him of his knuckles that time
Re-aligning stomachs
With bladders and baggy's
Swelling waters cushioning the baby drowning in floods of noir and tears
Salty seas dried
Crystallized
How much meth does it take to change a lightbulb?
Its a joke
Wolf ran out of puff so the pigs blew it down
Brown brick
Veins for trains
Moving mountains with a table spoon, hot knives and a folk in the road
"Should be feeding with the tools you've been...
25 reads
3 Comments
me and puppy are on the same page
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#rejection
#courage
#children
#soldiers
#conflict
50 reads
2 Comments
DIARY OF A FALLEN WRITER.
Though blood is still streaming in motion,boiling in my veins,urging this youthful body on,am afraid my spirit is under the attack of fatal infections;loss of vibrance,inspiration,zeal for life and severe lack of appetite for adventure!
Fall has engulfed,barely sipped my summer cocktail.Am clouded by fog,i see neither light nor an end to this tunnel.
The beats are loud and clear within my soul,but i have lost rhythm.Forgotten are the moves,i keep stepping on my toes.
My heart and mind are frozen in time,am a breathing shell,a faint soundtrack of once was a great...
Fall has engulfed,barely sipped my summer cocktail.Am clouded by fog,i see neither light nor an end to this tunnel.
The beats are loud and clear within my soul,but i have lost rhythm.Forgotten are the moves,i keep stepping on my toes.
My heart and mind are frozen in time,am a breathing shell,a faint soundtrack of once was a great...
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1 Comment
A List for Your Concideration
"boss"
"controller"
"captain"
"lord"
"king"
"queen"
"highness"
"master"
"consummate"
"pope"
"father"
"head of the flock"
"ruler"
"leader"
"god"
"protector"
"director"
"manager"
"overseer"
"chief"
"officer"
"commander"
"chief commanding officer" (which i find a bit redundant)...
"controller"
"captain"
"lord"
"king"
"queen"
"highness"
"master"
"consummate"
"pope"
"father"
"head of the flock"
"ruler"
"leader"
"god"
"protector"
"director"
"manager"
"overseer"
"chief"
"officer"
"commander"
"chief commanding officer" (which i find a bit redundant)...
50 reads
0 Comments
9TH Series, Mass Cure For.....DEVILS DRIVE VS GODS MIRACLES(Acoustic Version)
Intro(sing in a soft tone, turning loud as you sing, then Sing at the last line)
"(Searching for a mass cure...)
Devils Drive vs Gods Miracles
(Searching for a mass cure...)
Devils Drive vs Gods Miracles
(Salvation is near in death)
At heart and soul we find purity
(Our truth and final arsenal is vulnerable)
(Searching for a mass cure...)
Devils Drive vs Gods Miracles...."
DEVILS DRIVE VS GODS MIRACLES
Verse 1
Your final words will mean shit
They won't ever cross my mind(you pushed me far)
You pushed me to have so much...
"(Searching for a mass cure...)
Devils Drive vs Gods Miracles
(Searching for a mass cure...)
Devils Drive vs Gods Miracles
(Salvation is near in death)
At heart and soul we find purity
(Our truth and final arsenal is vulnerable)
(Searching for a mass cure...)
Devils Drive vs Gods Miracles...."
DEVILS DRIVE VS GODS MIRACLES
Verse 1
Your final words will mean shit
They won't ever cross my mind(you pushed me far)
You pushed me to have so much...
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9TH Sarcasm at Best Vs Tears of Sadness and Happiness
![restricted poem](/images/extremecontent.jpg)
29 reads
0 Comments
piss poor planning
![restricted poem](/images/extremecontent.jpg)
44 reads
3 Comments
Dick Traitor
![restricted poem](/images/extremecontent.jpg)
122 reads
0 Comments
Bleed Just To Know Your Alive
a comp entry*
Things worth looking for
are certainly worth gaining
But i'm not looking for love or riches
I'm in search of some pain
I casually start with my arms
The usual place of my self harm
The tip of the blade digs deep
Alas no reaction not even a peep
The blood rolls down as I move on
Surely I must feel it in my legs
I run the blade over my thighs
But the stinging only subsides
The frustration is unbearable
Have i succumb to such numbness
That I no longer feel any pain?
This depression...
Things worth looking for
are certainly worth gaining
But i'm not looking for love or riches
I'm in search of some pain
I casually start with my arms
The usual place of my self harm
The tip of the blade digs deep
Alas no reaction not even a peep
The blood rolls down as I move on
Surely I must feel it in my legs
I run the blade over my thighs
But the stinging only subsides
The frustration is unbearable
Have i succumb to such numbness
That I no longer feel any pain?
This depression...
60 reads
2 Comments
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